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Post by san475 on May 19, 2011 15:53:22 GMT -5
IGN: san475
Character's Name: Gregory Loranger
Character's Age: 24
demeanor/style: a man of the shadows. stays out of sight until the moment arises.
A short biography of your character: a assasin, a thief, a rascal. however you call them these are the people you see but dont see. you fear but you try not to. these are the people from the creed.
New World hopes: make a hideout, recruit, and build a creed.
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Post by bloberis on May 19, 2011 16:15:38 GMT -5
1. This bio is okay, needs work
2. There is already an active underworld
3. Please don't rip-off assassin's creed. Please. I'm fine that you're an assassin, but try and be more creative.
4. Build a creed? You mean build a guild (which you shouldn't do and just join the underworld) A Creed is a code of laws or rules, not the organization itself
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Post by Headhunter09 on May 19, 2011 17:41:39 GMT -5
Okay, a little clarification. The biography is a history of your character's life. Right now what you have in your bio belongs under the the character description.
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Post by san475 on May 19, 2011 17:52:28 GMT -5
ok so do you want me to rewrite it?
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Post by ersake on May 19, 2011 18:09:47 GMT -5
Yeah, uh, this bio shows an extreme lack of effort. Just sayin.... we kinda need deticated people right now, not that I know you very well, you could just be a poor writer like me XD.
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Post by bloberis on May 19, 2011 18:29:29 GMT -5
And, I'll say it again, don't rip-off assassin's creed.
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Post by ersake on May 19, 2011 18:37:16 GMT -5
look at headhunter's bio, or conzocrafters. Those are good examples I'd say.
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Post by bloberis on May 19, 2011 20:36:39 GMT -5
Or my bio  |
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Post by Headhunter09 on May 20, 2011 6:51:21 GMT -5
Yeah, uh, this bio shows an extreme lack of effort. Just sayin.... we kinda need deticated people right now, not that I know you very well, you could just be a poor writer like me XD. Way to show a lack of support. We should be supportive of each other. ok so do you want me to rewrite it? Not rewrite it per se. You can keep the general idea, but it needs to be fleshed out a bit more. |
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Post by conzocrafter on May 20, 2011 9:41:16 GMT -5
wow thanks for mentioning my bio matt  |
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Post by bloberis on May 20, 2011 14:11:16 GMT -5
Conzo, Ersake is the one who mentioned your bio
San, please don't try and start your own orginazation, just join the underworld, this server al ready has too high a faction to person ratio
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