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Post by Blackstar on Aug 21, 2011 19:18:20 GMT -5
In-game name: Blackstar
Character's Name: Sirrion
Character's Age: 16
Character's Race: Emergent
A short description of your character's demeanor, style, etc: Mostly loyal to other authorities. Although at times a little defiant, he can be strong when he has a task in mind.
Biography: Kazz Ryan was on a cruise trip when the Captain ordered a search built on the rumor of a terrorist onboard. This terrorist was crafty, for the captain had determined the terrorist to be Kazz. He was imeddiately an enemy of everyone aboard the ship and was thrown overboard into the ocean. Kazz saw land and swam to it. He found some odd fungus. On contact with it he became infected. He is now what the locals called an "Emergent". He stared in disbelief as the infection spread. Soon his heart matched the climate of the area - Cold. He reached the leader and was renamed "Sirrion" by the higher authorities of the Emergents. To mark what they believe was a change for the better. Sirrion's former trust for humans was already shattered aboard the cruise ship. Now those pieces were ground up into dust.
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Post by Ozzatron on Aug 21, 2011 19:39:59 GMT -5
Welcome to the forums, and although your bio is written very well, it's too short. About two paragraphs seems to be the norm.
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Post by purelamb on Aug 21, 2011 19:41:07 GMT -5
Welcome good to have another human join.
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Post by Ozzatron on Aug 21, 2011 20:04:05 GMT -5
You know even though the humans are the weakest race, they end up being the majority of the players. I find that kind of odd.
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Post by Blackstar on Aug 21, 2011 20:12:43 GMT -5
I seriously can't find a single way to make the bio longer.
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Post by Ozzatron on Aug 21, 2011 20:26:12 GMT -5
What did he do after he got ditched? How did he return to civilization, or did he build his own little house and survive by himself?
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Post by splamzloard on Aug 22, 2011 9:23:59 GMT -5
They aren't the weakest, they just don't have too many bonuses, but they have no downsides. They have boats, and I recall ash saying that their tools lated 20% longer and worked faster.
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Post by Ozzatron on Aug 22, 2011 10:17:26 GMT -5
Actually it's 25% longer.
::edit:: lol 1234th post
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Post by Blackstar on Aug 22, 2011 12:38:27 GMT -5
What did he do after he got ditched? How did he return to civilization, or did he build his own little house and survive by himself? The thing is that most of that happens when I actually get into the server (if I finally get accepted). But you gave me a vague idea as to how to lengthen it, even if slightly.
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Post by ashtheking on Aug 22, 2011 12:44:21 GMT -5
Here are a few ideas on how to expand your story. Why did he get ditched, how did he earn enough money for the cruise, and what are his eventual goals.
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Post by Blackstar on Aug 22, 2011 12:47:14 GMT -5
I'm going to completely rewrite the bio and try to make it clearer and longer. EDIT: This new one should definately work
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Post by Ozzatron on Aug 22, 2011 16:59:25 GMT -5
Yeah, it's much better now. There are no small towns on this map, just two huge cities (although IMO we should have small towns too, like on roads and what not.)
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Post by FlamingDragon96 on Aug 22, 2011 19:00:19 GMT -5
Well, we don't have enough people for more towns but that would be cool.
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Post by Ozzatron on Aug 22, 2011 19:13:11 GMT -5
Honestly we need more emergents.
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Post by splamzloard on Aug 22, 2011 21:10:25 GMT -5
Yeah, I think we only have one active, and that's their leader.
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